My idea for a character, please give tips/advive

[encryptedleprechaun]

Please judge and give tips/advice for my character.

Name: Jebbidiah Onyx

Race: Human/Chihuahua Shifter

Moon: Prospit

Title: Bard of Void

Planet: Land of Shrouds and Phases (Consorts: Indigo Iguanas)

Fetch Modus: Hourglass Modus

Upon entering an item into the modus it receives a ten minute limit, upon the limit reaching zero the item will be rendered inaccessible. In order to access items out of time you must “flip” the hourglass. Upon flipping the hourglass the order of items is reversed, and so is the time limit of each item. Items must accessed in numerical order of usability, if items 1, 3, 5 and 7 are inaccessible, then in order to get to item 8 you must remove items 2, 4 and 6 first. Time players could bend the rules of the modus with time shenanigans. Since the aspect of void deals with lacking all items flip themselves upon hitting the time limit, and upon doing so enter a new ten minute time period until they become usable on their own. The bard class has the chance of guaranteeing success, failure, or both for their group so, going with the glass half empty or half full concept, the time limit is halved. So a Bard of Void would only have to wait five minutes for each item to flip itself.

Chumhandle: encryptedLeprechaun

Quirks: TYPESinALTERATINGcapsANDlowercaseLETTERSwithoutSPACESwhenHEisEXCITEDandTYPESinTHIRDperson!!! Also, will type normally when not excited, but he still refers to himself in third person.

Strife Specibus: fistkind/pawkind, barrierkind, fireworkkind

Background: 15 years old, soon to turn 16. Lives in a giant tree house atop a rainforest canopy. Jeb's current guardian is his pet Chihuahua Patch, who is usually dressed as a pirate. For some reason, Patch has an incredibly high intelligence level, also he is unable to be seen by anyone besides Jeb. Jeb later learns that this is due to his powers that he was unaware of at the time. Jeb's real guardian was his father, who was struck by lightning while scouting their canopy when Jeb was only 8 years old. This triggered his powers to fight for survival and influence the nearest living creature, Patch. This destroyed the absence of knowledge within Patch's mind, thus giving him a much higher IQ then that of even the average adult, but no knowledge comes without a cost, and as such patch found that he had lost the Chihuahua instincts he once had. Patch now desired to be something more than a small dog, he would raise the baby next to him to be a great young man, though Patch was only  a one year old, this made him much older than Jeb, if you went by how things age by ratios, rather than using the human ways to measure time. Yet there was something about the eight year old human that made Patch feel that this was destined to be, as if Jeb and Patch were linked somehow. Jeb blacks out this entire section of his life because of how traumatic it was for him. Later Jeb's obsessions (he doesn't have interests) include Chihuahuas in costumes, pirates, pineapples, and fireworks. He is very tolerant of anything he runs into, unless they mess with his possession's, no one messes with a pirate's chest. Jeb is kind of a hoarder, but no one is dumb enough to call him out on it. He also has a slight, okay he should probably go to rehab for this, caffeine addiction. Jeb is not very strong and doesn't really see how he can use the fistkind specibus, however upon entering the medium Jeb finds himself randomly changing into a Chihuahua, along with all the memories he had blacked out as a child, apparently this is due to an accident where the ectobiologist in his session mixed his clone with patch. The paradoxical effect had made Jeb able to shift into a Chihuahua that had enhanced senses to the point where it could defeat several packs of wolves in battle, the only problem? It was extremely difficult for Jeb to control, the Chihuahua had a mind of its own, sort of, and its wants didn't always match Jeb's wants. Jeb eventually learns to control the change and the Chihuahua and his mind make peace,  but it takes a while. Anyways, while in Chihuahua form Jeb's inventory is inaccessible and the only strife specibus he can use is the fistkind specibus, only now it is the pawkind specibus, and he finds he has superhuman, or superchihuhua, strength. Chihuahua form is usually triggered by anything that would set a Chihuahua off. It lasts for a random amount of time, anywhere from a minute to a month. When it wears off Jeb suddenly just "fades," into his human form. Yes all clothes remain.

Prototyping: Jeb ends up prototyping a pirate ship in a bottle for the kernel sprite, and Patch after he asks to be prototyped to help Jeb.

[iD/sR/sT]

Looks mostly fine to me. People often open up organizational threads for sessions. Just write down everything that's required for joining and ask to join. The sessions are in the roleplaying thread.

[sømnølentScatterbrain]

Før yøur native sessiøn, as stated abøve, just make yøur øwn, starting it in the røleplaying sectiøn, ør try jøining an existing øne if pøssible.
As før the character, while all the inførmatiøn necessary før the play seems tø be in place, there's very little actually stated abøut the character itself. Try adding søme characteristics, like race, maybe a descriptiøn, if yøu're gøing crazy, a fully fledged character biøgraphy (backstøry). What I liked abøut what yøu have sø far is that yøu seem tø have a cøncept øf høw tø pørtrait the Bard øf ∅, and that yøu have a firm grasp øver the mechanics. Yøur typing quirk might be bøthersøme, but that is møstly the case with ∅ players. Alsø, I'm nøt sure what an "Asymmetrical Prøspit Dreamer" wøuld be, but that might be just me. If it isn't cømmøn knøwledge thøugh, I believe it wøuld be better if yøu wørded øut what it is. Anøther thing I nøticed is that yøu nøt telling abøut yøurself in there wøuld be very Bard øf ∅y, as Bards, in my øpiniøn, are alsø thøse whø tell, but ∅ is disinførmatiøn, which wøuld mean talking a løt while a∅ing certain imperative tøpics. Sø… this scøres cøølness pøints. Even thøugh it cøuld have been just me cønspiracytheøring.
A tl:dr versiøn wøuld be: Dø what yøu did in Fetch Mødus, but this time with yøur character itself.
A few tips I could give yøu is checking øther characters already created, tø get the hang øf høw yøu want tø dø it. I believe I heavily based my character page øn paradoxTactics', because øf høw ørganized it løøked, althøugh I tweaked it a bit in the end.
Anøther øne wøuld be the acrønyms (as in e.g. my Time player's LøPaST). I really like it tø make them have a meaning, but that might just be my thing. It's a thing nevertheless and it's fun tø have.
The last, I believe, tip I have, wøuld be, as førum games are møre størytelling than mechanics, føcusing øn the character's støry. While I'm certain, that this kind øf Fetch Mødus will have an amøunt øf impact øn the character's actiøns, sø will, if nøt møre, his past, and his persønality. If yøu have them støred in yøur mind, and just haven't written them øut, then it's Øk, but I wøuldn't see the pøint øf yøur pøst, if it were sø. So, write them øut and let us wørk øn them.

[encryptedleprechaun]

Ok, thanks for the advice, I altered his quirk a little, and I chose to make him human, or a Werechihuahua, depending on how crazy I'm allowed to make it.

[sømnølentScatterbrain]

Yøu're alløwed tø make it as crazy as yøu want tø, but før nøw, I persønally wøuld see changing intø a chihuahua as a majør drawback, the møre sø, in a game that wants tø kill yøu. Yøu'd prøbably have tø think of søme balancing abilities, if yøu'd want this tø wørk øut, accessible ønly in chihuahua førm.

Anøther thing, the text døesn't clearly state what thøse mysteriøus pøwers are, just that they influence animals in søme way, and that they grant yøu the ability tø "fight tø survive", which are bøth very vague, and, at least I, persønally, can imagine little seeing them.

What I had little idea, før where it came frøm, and'd like tø hear møre abøut, is why Patch has an incredibly high intelligence level. The answer might be a part øf the explanatiøn abøut Jeb's pøwers, but I still wanted tø ask it.

What I like is the pirate theme, keep that up, pirates are awesøme. The møre if yøu're øbsessed with firewørks, a pyrømaniac pirate is sømething I wish the divine being ruling the universe had made møre øf.

Next, if he's alternating caps withøut spaces, when exited, høw døes he write, when he's nøt.

At last, maybe think øf a set øf øbjects he cønsiders his treasure, which are the ønes øthers shøuldn't mess with, tø nøt tø make him angry.

Nøw, an idea that yøu døn't have tø incørpørate, but I'd like tø share in case yøu like it. Instead øf being a Werechihuahua, yøu cøuld make him sømething of a Chihuahulk, turning intø a chihuahua, when angry (møst prøbably, because øf løss øf treasure). Yøu'd prøbably have tø play øut løøsing øf cøntrøl øver the character, which means, diminishing success in søme øf the current, at that time, shørt term gøals, but cøuld prøbably make him sømewhat ØP før a shørt duratiøn øf time. ØP, and immensely funny, being a miniature døg, destrøying bøsses.

[encryptedleprechaun]

Okay, I adjusted the character to my liking, and I think this is the final result.